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The first draft of my article

 Today's blog post I will show you my firts draft for my final project:


The first paragraph:


The second paragraph:


The third paragraph:


The fourth paragraph:


The fifth paragraph:



The sixth paragraph:                                                                                                                                           


The seventh paragraph:



 The eighth and ninth paragraph:

                                    
The two last paragraph:

Until now, I have learned that there are a lot of ifinancial impact of Covid-19 ad that we will have more problems in the next months.

On this draft of the article I should improve the main point of the whole major project, The financial problems that caused fromCovid-19. I think that I should put more details about this point.In addition I should remove some wwords/paragraphs of this news article, and to write better factors. 

I have received feedback from my Tutor and I will write another one post that it will contains the final article.



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  1. Jurian VisserDecember 19, 2020 at 11:12 PM

    It is great to see you have written a draft and are developing this further; however, it is essential to include critical commentary and reflection on the work. Look back at the work you have created and write about your actions, thoughts and the processes you used. What have you learned so far, what problems and challenges did you face and how did you solve these problems and how will you improve this work.

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