On this blog post I will show you some of the feedback that I received from my tutor and some of the changes: The feedback for the first Paragraph is t o write a better hook and also to put Afghanistan in context by discussing briefly the history and where they are now. Afghanistan is a country in south central Asia. For many years, In this country there is a big problem. This problem is the inequality between people, specifically women are considered inferior. Goverment and general women have to do something about this problem because al people have the right ti live normal. The equality is very good value for each person. Frances Wright suggested that the equality is the soul of liberty there is, in fact, no liberty without it. The topic that I will discuss in this essay is the inequality that there is in Afghanistan. The feedback for the second Paragraph is to do more researc and to summarise the points To sum up, we live in the year 2021 but still in some co...
You have created a list in Milanote that show steps that need to be taken for the project, but there is no actual development of your work here. Please remember that we are in week 8 now. We need to see actual pieces for your project.
ReplyDeleteI can notice here initial thoughts about your major project, that gives me only an outline of the final piece. I will be so satisfied to see how you manage to develop your project in steps. It would be great to see a further improvement of your work and extended written explanation of added Milanote board to as it will show actual progression. Please remember to present and analyse your posts more in-depth and reference correctly.
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